Poem Draft: after a week of chocolate withdrawal

after a week of chocolate withdrawal

curious, standing three-quarter turned from him
backlit in a sunshine space, his hand cupped a shape
a sickle thwacked the passion fruit that dream dubbed
cocoa pod, cracked the shell as a lobster mantle,
plasma welled, he called it wound juice, tipped it
drank it sap sweet, licked his lip, offered it to my
shaken head,

he broke into the fruit, pulled the halves, scooped
the pulpy black meat with a metal paddle, worked it
back and forth on a soapstone slab, sunlight from
sudden clerestory, room rough-hewn limestone large
the sibilant slaps works out the 3 layers of the bean,

one thick as lotus paste, a humus blackness, he laid
a dab on the end of the paddle, offered me, at a pinch
my hairline tingled, at tongue complexity of flowers,
smoke, bitter grainy undernote, behind it, slow release
so tender my frame tightened in fear of it, recaptured
too much of my own breath, felt a dizziness compel exit

I stayed, still his slap and from the compound
the thickest was all worked out, slid to one side
mounds of coffee black, almost dry cocoaed clay
while from the smoothening brown separated the
last of slow of warm golden honey run, nose humming

tactile energy field topaz growing towards his
swelling mist of burnt umber wrinkled sweat
where the two heats met between our sides
I dipped a cautious finger to the stone, watching
his face gave permission of slow eye crease smile,
the honey-whey of viscous cocoa rolled my head,

stoically refused to eye the caramel cream of melting
mid density, still he swayed his glinting blade working
loose more of the last two grades and I could feel
the ceiling of the room rise, an aria of skylights

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4 Comments

  1. I have to admit, I normally prefer poems with less detail, mainly because I have a short attention span and am easily distracted — but there is so much good detail in this, I found myself drawn in. There is a definite tension (of a good kind) running through this, and the chocolate withdrawal warning before the poem made me smile. So many visual phrases to choose from; one of my favorites:

    . . .
    swelling mist of burnt umber wrinkled sweat
    where the two heats met between our sides
    I dipped a cautious finger to the stone, watching
    his face gave permission of slow eye crease smile,
    the honey-whey of viscous cocoa rolled my head,

    stoically refused to eye the caramel cream of melting
    mid density, still he swayed his glinting blade working
    loose more of the last two grades and I could feel
    the ceiling of the room rise, an aria of skylights

    (a great ending)

    Marcia (MeeAugraphie)
    http://meeaugraphie.blogspot.com

  2. Breathtaking.
    I read it aloud to myself the second time and relished the consciousness that it afforded me. How sensory your descriptions are! I feel a kinship with your words, with this moment that you wrote.

    Telula Eyre
    telulaeyre.blogsource.com

  3. Ringing of the Bards

    Hi Pearl,

    I’m hosting the Ringing of the Bards poetry carnival, April 15th. If you’d like to be included, leave a permalink to a poem here:

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    And don’t forget to come back and see the carnival!

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