Toes tight curled in shoes, arriving in a private park near the border of B.C. and Alberta, driving down the switchback lane down bluff, with a guard rail looking like a wriggly gum wrapper caught around the worst curves. At dusk, setting up camp, peg poles in by feel, fingers finding lilliputian cacti. Overcast night with no fallen net of city’s stars anywhere, the negative ions of the rushing river sent over a nervous energy, filling the limbs with motion. In the night white caps and thoughts rise and flatten black. Eventually hips rise from the small cacti that latched to sleeping bag, and feet follow sound. Before dawn, the trains running parallel to river, my lipline a low angle to where dawn will come, lying across the peninsula of shore stone, mind too heavy to turn, too bedsore of old thoughts to stay.
tide washed stones
palms leaned on for hours
pressed shinier
People respond in haibun, haiku, senryu, tanka and other short forms. Other responses Bodies of Water prompt at One Deep Breath
I remember, back in the day, enjoying Sheila Murphy’s versions of haibun:
http://www.unf.edu/mudlark/mudlark08/contents.html
omg, that’s a rich resource. I hadn’t heard of her or Mudlark. I’m cancelling my morning whatever else plans and reading that.
It is my pleasure to nourish you, Pearl.
🙂 Which reminds me, I should update my food blog again…nourish some eyes to hunger…
i had an intuition about your storytelling and now i’m wondering,
are you writing a novel?
(shrug) thought never occurred to me. I rarely read them even. short-form story telling oral and written narrative and breaking narrative, those are increasingly interesting
perhaps a compilation of shorts and prose?
perhaps. At some point I’l need to look at what I have and see what more can be done with it all. Flash fiction this year adds up to about 16-18 pages.
that’s lovely!
i love the “in the night white caps and thoughts rise and flatten back”.
i’m having a bit of difficulty grasping the haiku though.
and i didn’t know you’ve been to / live near b.c. / alberta?
good to know what works and is unclear. 🙂
I have been to B.C. 3 times and drove thru part of Alberta once, back in August 2000.
i think it’s the middle line “palm leaned for hours”. i’m not quite sure what this image is trying to portray or perhaps there’s word play here i’m not understanding.
oh i see. did you like it? it’s very pretty in the rockies.
yes, it’s too truncated I’m afraid. “the palm of the hand leaned on the rock for hours”
The rockies were nice. It was a memorable trip.