Closeness

Some recent mullings around the idea closeness to jot on the excuse of Prompt 73: Closeness.
Not all constitute haiku’s brevity and resolvedness, suggestion rather than tell. Some are more lyrical shorts, one more an outline than a tanka, but decide as you may…
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from 3 rooms away
a breath change. Response:
“something you want to share?”
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the knife bloodier
than the finger
skeptical goodness
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bundle of dog
sniffing
leashed by a look
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100 acre farmsteads
fences in fallow –
who’s your neighbour?
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George Mercer Dawson‘s
memoir of portage,
1870s swamp –
dad’s story of cow,
Bear Island quicksand
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tight as hot oil
to wrist skin
the word “buddy”
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boy in the crosswalk
adjusts shoulders
matches his Dad’s
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walk thru a space
one person wide
– bang width of 2
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a double-headed shoulder
a couple watches stage
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eavesdrop surprised skin
leaning in a private word:
“ma’am fight against
the revolution”
leaf wet night street
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the tip-tap
nails approach
dawn

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8 Comments

  1. I enjoyed all of these, but really liked the first (change of breath) and the seventh (boy imitating his father).

    — Rae Trigg (raetrigg.blogspot.com)

  2. closenss

    “something to share” and “leashed look” are fantastic! What fun you’re having with this!

  3. fabulous offerings…so many times i have seen one of my sons match their father’s posture – your words to capture that are beautiful!

  4. fabulous offerings…so many times i have seen one of my sons match their father’s posture – your words to capture that are beautiful!
    (qualcosa di bello)

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