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For One Deep Breath, Week 9 the theme is Gardens for haiku. A few moods and styles of haiku:
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nature grooms herself:
brown columbine flower stalk
popped off overnight
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tomato unhooked
from stem
breast weight in palm
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tomato cluster
a traffic light
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so thirsty it burst
its own skin. Grinning,
soused tomato
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come see, comme ca?
absence makes the heart go wander.
be aware of where, uh where, tupperware earrings and rings,
oh wear the wares, are U tonight, why did you leave me wary beware,
I lurched the world over.. caught a round werwolf, he snared a lover
and poof I was wrong.
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I enter, in no cooler than out,
a steam sauna of a day
leaving myself open to chance
leave the door unlocked
it would take a godly crew
of shirtless men with a ram
(turgid, battering or sacrificial)
to part the swollen wood
from thickened jamb,
out no cooler than in
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.wav now
each moment a culmination, concepts thaw on paper, food can’t help but taste, retract, not detract from, attract to, proactive dews, dusk at the due time, protractors scribe, you have arrived to describe John Deere tractors arc, slipping even with chains, rutting, unstucking, traction lost is not inaction gained, pulled on the pavement to action, arch of protracted effort, dervishing, extract from fort of another era’s bones, arrows, fortitude, fortunate, tune nit, picked a knit cap, throw that into the ring, ola.
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Source: Jane Reichhold at Aha Poetry has a lot of food for thought at the comparison. Some seem to write tanka if they overflow on syllable count for haiku but they are different beasts.
TANKA————————–HAIKU
History
13 centuries———————–3 centuries
Aim
beauty—————————–is-ness
lyrical——————————-fragmented
Social Background
courtly —————————-merchants and lower class
literary—————————–part of a game
Techniques
to savor beauty ——————–to open the heart
contemplation———————-quick and direct
emotional —————————aim to have no emotion
uses imagination——————–senses with concrete images
written to assigned themes ——-based on an experience
Tanka for the Memory by Jane Reichhold (same source)
From tanka’s long history – over 1300 years recorded in Japan- the most famous use of the poetry form of tanka was as secret messages between lovers. Arriving home in the morning, after having dallied with a lover all night, it became the custom of well-mannered persons to write an immediate thank-you note for the pleasures of the hospitality. Stylized into a convenient five lines of 5-7-5-7-7 onji, the little poem expressing one’s feelings were sent in special paper containers, written on a fan, or knotted on a branch or stem of a single blossom. These were delivered to the lover by personal messenger who then was given something to drink along with his chance to flirt with the household staff. During this interval a responding tanka was to be written in reply to the first note which the messanger would return to his master.